1. Alex is very aware of how her body works.
Alex is a psychic whose powers are activated by arousal. As such, she has become keenly aware of what turns her on, and what does not. She is also very in-tune with the long-documented concept of "thought orgasms." This is shown in a scene in which she pleasures herself.
"Years of unofficial research had led Alex to believe that men were primarily concerned with the cleanliness of a woman’s breasts. At least, when showering with a man her breasts received special and extensive attention. When Alex wanted to prepare herself, however, she focused on other areas, running her hands in slow circles behind her knees, languorous strokes up the insides of her thighs or along the delicate planes of her neck. Her painted toes turned the faucet on again and again, refilling the hot water. She didn’t have to bother with shaving, at least, Pasha, her brilliant Rumanian accountant, had showed her how to make trips to the salon, the gym, and the dermatologist business expenses, bless him, and so her time was true luxury. She checked the time again. Neil wouldn’t be home for a couple of hours. She slid her hand below the water. Self-care, as Selah often reminded her, was very important. "
Alex has built a career around her powers. She has made herself a name is a private investigator. While most clients are grateful, some are jerks, and she is not standing for that.
“So,”
he boomed, “this is our little detective.” Alex felt the muscles
in her jaw tighten, but forced her mouth into a smile. “Indeed,”
she said, extending her hand and grasping it. She could feel his eyes
crawling over her like bugs. She sighed inwardly. Inevitably, it came
to this; the man who saw her only for the sex and not her expertise.
She would make this report as brief of possible.
Turning
away from the Neanderthal, she handed the file to Richard. His smile
seemed apologetic. “Everything is here,” she said, “bank
accounts, the affected clients, approximate dates and amounts.”
“Thank
y- “ Richard began. His courtesy was cut off by an indulgent
chuckle.
“Forgive
me for asking,” he said, in a way that made it clear that he was
not, in the least, apologetic, “but how can we possibly tell if
this information is reliable.”
“Ms.
Campbell has completed satisfactory inves- “
“Well,
even a broken clock is right twice a day,” he said with a simian
grin. He turned to Alex, who could feel her blood pumping in her
temples. “What guarantee can you give that your . . .
unconventional approach actually works.”
Alex
had a canned speech that she used in these situations. It included a
list of times she can been called as an expert witness, her
curriculum vitae, her education. Today, however, she decided to take
a more direct approach. She sauntered over to the towering man and
started through her lashes into his eyes. Her pink tongue darted out,
briefly, moistening her lips. She slid one hand up his torso from his
waist to his shoulder, grabbing him when he moved away in surprise.
With the other hand, she reached below his belt. His eyes widened in
surprise. However,she quickly located evidence that he was not
entirely displeased by the attention. Alex closed her eyes and
focused. The information came slowly, she had not prepared herself,
mentally, physically, or otherwise, for an investigation, but her
brow furrowed and eventually it came.
“You
were supposed to have a date last night,” she murmured. “Someone
you met online. You bought flowers and sat at the table for two
hours. She never came. You went home and watched porn.”
His
eyes, which had grown steadily larger since the moment Alex
approached him, were bulging by the time he pulled indignantly away.
He was panting slightly. The large man cleared his throat,
straightened his tie, and looked at Mr. Lowe.
“Tell
Mr. Langley to meet me in my office,” he said, and strode out of
the room.
"
3. Alex holds Hank accountable.
Hank is the handsome local detective who sometimes hires Alex to help the LMPD out on cases. They are more than a team, though, they are friends. When Hank forgets these elements of their relationship, Alex is not afraid to call him out.
“I don’t do
this because I particularly like these jobs, you know,” she said.
He looked up,
shocked at the anger in her voice.
“It certainly
isn’t for the money, either, I get paid less for this shit than I
do any of my other jobs. You think I like spending my time
in roach hotels or standing in blood splatter instead of condos on
the beach?”
“Why do you do
it, then?” he asked.
“Because I want
to help! I want to do something that really helps people. I want to
affect something more than some company’s bottom line or do more
than confirm for a wife what she already fucking knew. But more than
that I do it. . .”
She trailed off,
afraid to say more, already a lump was rising in her throat. Hank had
treated her with dignity and respect. They had become friends. Good
friends. Suddenly, she couldn’t take it anymore. Neil. The serial
killer. Isolation. Her own possible death. It was just too much. She
wrote a name, description, and address on a napkin and slid it across
the table.
“Here,” she
said around tears. “Do what you want to with it.”
4. Hank, himself, does not treat Alex like a wilting flower.
Hank is worried about Alex, which is a sign of caring. Even in that, though, he does not condescend. This scene was really important to me, because I actually rewrote it twice to make sure that Hank was being supportive and not trying to be the white knight. Although, in another scene, Alex is not afraid to use others' vision of her as a damsel in distress to get her way. Read both below to see the contrast.
She could tell
that they still weren’t convinced. She was torn between gratitude
for and irritation with their concern. She was, after all, hardly a
damsel in distress. If that was what they wanted, however ...
Alex slumped,
lowering her lashes and pursing her lips. She sighed deeply and then
straightened up. Sad but strong. It had the desired effect; she had
their undivided attention.
“If it makes you
feel any better,” she began, “You’ll be doing me a favor as
well.”
Slowly, with a
haltingness that was not part of her show, Alex explained what she
had discovered and how. They reacted just as she had thought they
would, with a protectiveness that made her glad that she wasn’t the
perpetrator. She waded through the prerequisite offers to “disappear
him” and “take his place” and when they had died down she
continued.
“The way I see
it, we’d be doing each other a solid. I’d be somewhere that he
couldn’t find me, and you’d have someone who could follow this
lead. As sexy as Miggs is,” she continued, “I’m not sure he
could pull off sequins.”
All eyes turned to
Hank, whose jaw muscled bulged and relaxed as if he was chewing gum.
Even through her Onyx Alex could see deep crimson rolling off him. He
stared at her for a long moment.
“All right,”
he said at last, “Let’s do it. Alex, stay here. Let’s get you
what you need. The rest of you, get to work.”
Hank leaned over
his desk, his hands splayed on the scarred laminate. One foot tapping
restlessly on the floor. He spoke in very measured tones.
“Are you okay?”
he said at last.
Alex tried to
answer. She tried several times but each time her resolve, her
ability to compartmentalize shuddered with the weight of the water
behind it.
“I’m
surviving,” she finally replied. Hank nodded slowly.
“Alex.. “he
said, and then nothing. “Why didn’t you tell me?”
Alex picked at her
cuticle for a moment. She’d always wanted model’s hands, those
well-manicured smooth wonders. But she couldn’t handle the
emotional burden of a manicure, the nail techs heard so much. So much
and that emotion had to go somewhere. Her hands were large,
blunt-tipped.
“Because I
didn’t want this,” she said at last.
“What?” Hank
asked.
“This” Alex
said louder, gesturing to the office. “I didn’t want a dozen big
brothers trying to protect me, getting in my way. I didn’t want a
bunch of people knowing my business, or a skeeze or two thinking this
was their big break. I didn’t want pity. I especially didn’t want
pity.”
Hank moved to the
font of his desk and put his hands lightly on her shoulders. She
raised her eyes to his and shuddered a bit, remembering the night
before.
“I don’t pity
you,” he said, “I pity him.”
Alex felt rage
start to rush through her then she caught Hank’s smile.
“In addition to
being boring, and obviously stupid, if that man so much as hiccups in
your direction he’s going inside for years. “Alex laughed, a
stray tear making its way down her cheek.
“Probably has a
small dick, too,” he said as an afterthought.
“I’ve seen
better,” Alex agreed. Pettily. And it felt good. Indulging in her
anger for a minute felt damn good.
“So, what do you
need?” Hank asked.
Alex’s mind
worked rapidly.
“I’ll need a
throwaway cell and a place to stay. Also, some identification. Some
clothes. Do you have anyone in vice who could give me a primer?”
Hank nodded.
“Yeah, and we will also get a couple of guys to show up every now
and then, keep an eye on you, especially to and from work. When do
you need this by?”
Alex pondered,
“give me two days to get ready?” she asked.
Hank affirmed,
“I’ll also make sure you have some coverage between now and
then.”
Alex shook her
head wordlessly, but Hank held up a hand.
“It’s
ultimately your call,” he said, “but hear me out. I just want
someone parked nearby, so if you need help, you just have to call.
Otherwise we will stay out of your hair."
It was very important to me that Alex be a nuanced character. She is attractive and also clumsy. She gets stressed out. She likes good food and bad music. She loves her friends dearly. She takes yoga and martial arts classes. These were all very important elements to me. Also, they can add a bit of humor, which I found appealing. That is shown in the following scene:
"Excruciatingly slowly, Alex eased her arm out from under the man she had been interrogating for six weeks. Her hand was asleep, cold and clammy, and she shook it gently, keeping one wary eye on his face. He didn’t move. Once the feeling had returned to her arm, Alex moved to phase two of her plan. She eased her free leg and arm off the edge of the bed, lowering them and letting gravity take her with deliberate nonchalance, to the ground. The last 18 inches went more quickly than she’d anticipated, and with a thud far louder than the acrobat’s landing she had planned, Alex was free stopped snoring with a snort. His name was Fred Langley, which added another layer of difficulty to the case as it was incredibly difficult to yell “Fred” with sincere passion and ecstasy. Alex froze, her brown eyes wide. After a second, he rolled over and the rhythmic sounds started again. Alex heaved a sigh of relief and began army crawling to the foot of the bed. She found her panties, black lace of course, and slid them on before peeking, Kilroy-like up to the bed. Fred was still sleeping. God bless Fred. And Merlot. And multiple orgasms. She stood and looked for her bra. It was nowhere to be found. Damn it. She’d liked that one. Oh well, it couldn’t be helped. She slid her dress, thanking the deities of fashion for sheaths, over her head. She twisted to reach the zipper and nearly fell, banging her hip on the dresser with a muffled curse. Fine, she’d fix it in the elevator. Alex grabbed her clutch and strappy sandals and left the room, dangling the shoes from her fingers and closing the door in slow motion. Once it had latched she sprinted for the elevator, pushing the button five times in a row."
6. Alex has emotions. All of them.
While Alex is badass, it was equally imperative that she be able to get angry, and sad, and betrayed. Alex can get scared and exhausted. Sometimes she can fight through; sometimes she can't. This added a necessary element of humanity that, I think, elevated the entire story. The next scene describes the time that she chose to sleep with her husband, one last time, while blocking her powers.
She knew that she
needed to go into the next few days with her eyes, all of them, wide
open. Yet she fastened the onyx around her neck. For one night, she
would take her chances. Tomorrow she could be scared and angry. She
could be a detective. Tomorrow she could be a psychic. For just one
night, for her last night, she just wanted to be a wife.
7. Alex gets it done.
I'm not going to elaborate on this much, because I don't want there to be any spoilers. But this woman gets things done, even when she needs a bit of an assist from time to time. And I love that about her.
What started as a silly idea, with a lot of work, turned into a novel that I'm proud of, one that I think breaks some of the tropes we see so often while staying true to the genre. If you are intrigued, you can buy it here. If you have already read it, I'd love to hear whether you think I made it or not.